Talk:1895 Atlantic hurricane season/GA1

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Nominator: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 03:01, 1 May 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 17:41, 16 May 2024 (UTC)

I'll be reviewing this.

• "Neither meteorologists José Fernández-Partagás and Henry F. Diaz in 1996 nor the Atlantic hurricane reanalysis project added or removed any storms during their reanalysis of the season. " - this has the word "reanalysis" twice, but that could be jargony for the average reader. Could you rewrite this to give it better context? Even just reordering the sentence would be helpful to indicate why this is important (I get it)

• Better?--12george1 (talk) 04:24, 20 May 2024 (UTC)

• Given that the season summary was just stated in the lead, I think you could cut down on some of the details, so the information isn't mentioned three times, and twice in such a short succession is a little redundant. Make it more of an overview? For instance, the impacts don't have to be mentioned here as well, since they weren't that extreme.

• Better?--12george1 (talk) 01:25, 23 May 2024 (UTC)

• "Thereafter, the cyclone likely intensified further in the Gulf of Mexico and peaked with winds of 110 mph (175 km/h) " - given that this is the strongest storm of the season, could you add a bit more into how the winds were estimated? Perhaps include the pressure here?

• It looks like both the winds and pressure were estimated based on damage described in Michael J. Ellis's 1988 Hurricane Almanac --12george1 (talk) 04:24, 20 May 2024 (UTC)

• Also for H2, I think the Chenoweth bit could be in the first paragraph, which is already MH

• Done--12george1 (talk) 04:24, 20 May 2024 (UTC)

• According to The Seneca News, the "Mexican National and the Monterey and Gulf railways were the heaviest losers.",[6] with several hundred yards of the former completely washout in some places and many destroyed rail bridges. - is the quote needed? Perhaps word it by mentioning "the former" bit first, and then add "the Gulf railways also sustained heavy damage" as a separate bit? IDK, I'm not a fan of quoting unless necessary, and I don't even know if it was according to the Seneca news, as a lot of times these are written by staff writers for AP, AFP, whatnot.

• Rephrased to remove the quote --12george1 (talk) 04:24, 20 May 2024 (UTC)

• "Meteorologist Ivan Ray Tannehill began the track for this storm" - any idea when this assessment was? Not vital, but I'm curious now. You could also word it like "which was concurred by subsequent analyses" instead of mentioning Chenoweth and Partagas and Diaz in the same section, all to say the same thing.

• Added that, but I do think Chenoweth and Partagas/Diaz should still be mentioned separately because Chenoweth starts the track three days earlier, including a landfall over Nicaragua--12george1 (talk) 04:24, 20 May 2024 (UTC)

• A correspondent to The Nassau Guardian described northern Bimini as "a wreck from one end to the other." - now this quote I liked. I guess I didn't want the word "loser" in the article, that term is reserved for other subject matters, like in Manhattan at this very moment, perhaps
• In Other storms -

• "The first such system began on June 8 as a subtropical storm. " - Where?

• Offshore North Carolina--12george1 (talk) 01:25, 23 May 2024 (UTC)

• Also, can you broadly summarize Chenoweth's analysis? Something like "Chenoweth based his assessments on surface and ship observations", IDK, something to wrap it up, since the article ends otherwise on an unfinished note, especially since his analysis hasn't been approved (yet).

• Added a little bit more about Chenoweth's study to the season summary--12george1 (talk) 01:25, 23 May 2024 (UTC)

So that's it. Should be easy, hopefully. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 17:41, 16 May 2024 (UTC)

Finally got around to doing more work on this article. Thanks for the review--12george1 (talk) 01:25, 23 May 2024 (UTC)